Cailey

I edited this, hopefully it's better with the new changes. :D

So, I came up with the title and liked it, so this is me trying to write something to fit the title. I don't know if I like it or ...

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Well, maybe we should wait until Logan and Beatrice are officially entered into the story before anything too exciting happens...

I liked it, very short and peaceful, at first. I loved how you said, "a tear drops from the faucet" it showed that the poem wasn't just a happy peaceful ...

Due to your lack of stanzas, I felt like the whole poem was rushed. I didn't have time to let the words sink in because I was just trying to ...

My first kiss was a goodbye kiss, I agree with the kiss/kiss repetition. Though, depending on how the song sounds it could work. my my my first word was goodbye, ...

I love it!! It's so simple and yet filled with emotion. I wished it was longer, but I realized if it was it wouldn't be quite as good. I have ...

Lots of emotion in here, it clearly expresses what you are trying to say. I was wondering if there are any reasons for the size of each stanza? It bugged ...

Luna I continued searching for Amanda's lost object, until suddenly my fingers found something. I looked down to see what I held and was shocked to see a syringe. Immediately, ...

You have no punctuation... but, I suppose since it's poetry it isn't all that necesary. It kind of bugged me that the last stanza was longer... I guess I'm just ...

Hm, I wish I had a good review. But I don't. I noticed absolutely no mistakes (except the one pointed out by priceless.) It was a beautiful poem, so simple ...

Before anything, the first time I read this, I had no clue what the point was. It felt like your ideas were jumbled and rather unclear. Also, stanza breaks would ...

Very good story. It caught my attention and interest. I like how it started out, like Ang said, like Madeline. Then, it turned into a story about Angels and all. ...

Don't have much of a review. I did notice some mistakes, but now I can't find them. So, maybe read through it once more and see if you can find ...