Cailey

So cute, and yet sad how you end it with the implication the person you're talking to isn't yours. Of course, I wish you would elaborate. Why do you know ...

I like it so much. I am half asleep, so no real review, sorry. But, I had to say something. I liked it very much!! :D

Luna I was shocked at what was going on around Amanda. I saw the syringe fly away again, and I wasn't sure what to feel. then, someone listened to my ...

I really don't want to sound harsh. However, this needs work. I know it's a diary, I know it was written from the point of view of someone who lived ...

Luna I saw Abby and Drustan run into the woods. I guess my throw hadn't been as hidden as I'd hoped. Amanda's hysterical voice rose, and with my voice filled ...

Green, although they look more blue sometimes, and gold sometimes. :)

Lion, lion where art thou? Between this and your introduction, I'm already hooked. :) Hiding in these darkest dreams. You may prowl and try to hide, but I can feel ...

Got it and read some of it. :D Awesome!

Before anything, I like the title. :) It's a poem in itself. a slender, fragile age of seventeen. the sky was crying for her, for all the tears she held ...

Good, but this doesn't have enough emotion. I think your character would feel so much more strongly about this. You just say it almost casually, as if you don't really ...

He trod upon the waters as if they were a grassy meadow. He fed the multitudes with food fit barely fit for one man. He caused the weak to stand ...

Awe!! It's so sad and emotional and makes me want to cry. It almost sounds like your friend is dying! Seriously, how in the world can you make it sound ...

This is really good, but I'd say it could use some work. First off, you should read it out loud a few times, there are places when the flow gets ...

It's very very very short. And it doesn't really say much, of anything. I guess if it got rid of writer's block it's good, but as a poem, it needs ...

Words on lined paper Blur Tears burn their acidweet trail Acid-sweet. :D Down the toocold skin too cold. Of my face Love the imagery here! Why is the toocold skin ...