Cailey

this is awesome. :) I love your tone, I think I reviewed another one of your poems too, and I just really like the way you word everything. this makes ...

I really loved this piece. the comparison you have, as though life's trouble really could be washed away with a shower, is great. You had a lot of cool details ...

OK, so here is my review. I think for this piece you should have either decided to make life sound all good or all bad. I mean, if you are ...

Well, I must say I can't quite find your rhyme scheme. Was it ABAC, or AABC, or AAAC? It felt like it changed in each stanza. Yet, ignoring that, it ...

this was great, I really liked it! I just have a few comments. You seemed to change your tone after the first section. Was it on purpose? Because at first ...

Yeah, I know it's a song and the grammar doesn't matter as much, plus you shorten words to fit the rhythm and all, but I'm going to go ahead and ...

You had a lot of great desciption and imagery hear. I loved your references to the rain and how the two kept staring into the distance and at anywhere other ...

Amazing! this was a good poem, and story and well, I just really liked it. :) So, now for a few words of advice and nitpicks and such. there were ...

I could feel the relish with which the hands gently picked me up and carressed my glass sides. How lovingly those lips neared mine and brushed so softly and so ...

Freedom calls to me: Loud and strong and clear. World’s I long to see- Are nowhere near here. Far across the sea Floats a great and bright Future I could ...

You should work on your rhythm, not all of the stanzas flowed very well. Particularly the fourth stanza, and seventh and tenth. they sounded choppy. And the last stanza could ...

I liked this, although it was a bit hard to read. Maybe I'm just not smart enough to understand. Anyway, it flowed well, and had plenty of imagery and details, ...

I agree, this is beautiful. In the last sentence of the first paragraph you wrote that instead of than. And in the second paragraph you left off an s after ...

First off, I don't like your formatting, it makes the whole piece feel chopped up and broken. And maybe that is what you're going for, but it's still kind of ...

this was good. It is more of a story. I liked how it was in letter form, that made it one hundred times better. :) I did notice that the ...