Cailey

this is really good. I like the emotion put into this, and the way you explain this all almost as if it is normal and as if there could not ...

Chapter 5 Then it happened. That day when Eliana rushed in through the glass doors with tears streaming down her face. As she struggled with the gate he entered, anger ...

Chapter 4 It was raining the day he came along. And he walked with Eliana, his hand firmly in hers. She giggled stupidly and tumbled in every direction as he ...

Chapter 3 Eliana finally came home a week after the body had been carried out. In that time it was her father who woke up with the sun and called ...

Chapter 2 It felt like only a matter of days before Eliana could push the button to call me without standing on her tiptoes. Every morning she would run down ...

this isn't really a novel, more like a long short story. Make sense? But I figured I would post it as a novel so you would be able to read ...

I really like your rhyme scheme, and the overall poem. It was really good. There were places where the flow wasn't perfect, but I guess in a way that fit ...

This is awesome! I love your details, like the ant, and the emotion you put in here. It is clear and easy to understand, and it's interesting, exciting. I did ...

Name: Lamika Resai Age: 16 Gender: Female Race: Elf (LOtR style, but they don't live forever. average death age would be around 200.) Appearance: tall, long straight blonde hair, green ...

All is not well in the land of Birathi. the name of this kingdom, Birathi, meant bright, but now, 2000 years after it's creation it is far from bright. KIng ...

It made me sad that this is so short. :( I wanted more! You have such a cool style, it's awesome. I really don't have much to review here. Your ...

First off, you have waaaay to many commas. You don't need a comma every place where the reader should pause for breath. I won't go over it all, but you ...

Well, I hope this was supposed to be a little bit funny, because it made me laugh. Maybe it was the rhyming, which made it sound like it could be ...

Well, you have already gotten a bunch of reviews, so I hope I'm not just repeating everything they said. Just in case, I will start out with my opinion, since ...

Confusing, and even though I was trying to figure out what was happening, it still didn't completely made sense. I think the overall plot is a guy who went crazy? ...