Cailey

So, before I forget I'll give you the things I think you can change. First of all, the third stanza. to me it felt out of place. It didn't fit ...

Still a work in progress, and kind of long. However, I would appreciate it if you could read through it and review? Its eventually going to be in a contest, ...

Sorry, I posted this twice. :)

Lamika the camp errupted with the sound of battle. Lamika's chair was knocked over, leaving her free of the ropes around her waist. Quickly she undid the ones around her ...

Lamika She could hear soldiers constantly, but she could never see anyone. Now the tone of their conversation changed and darkened. A breathless voice began to speak: "We've caught sight ...

I believe in the Creator. I believe the world was created in six days. I believe that the Bible is the Word of God. I believe that Word is truth. ...

Lamika When she opened her eyes again the world was dark. A few silhouettes moved in front of her, but she couldn't see clearly. A hand suddenly shook her roughly ...

Lamika the king's men came in the dead of night. Jenko and Firego were fast asleep, curled up next to each other for warmth. All the other travelers were asleep ...

this was good; I wish I had a better review for you, but it was really short and simple. You didn't make your readers guess at the ending, which is ...

Lamika "If he is he should get back soon. I'm so tired..." Lamika moved to stretch out and yawned. Haven had already left, and she couldn't help being jealous that ...

Lamika "I was the first one to begin this journey, do you really think I would leave?" Lamika smiled and tried to act like she wasn't worried or afraid. Still, ...

Like you said already, it needs to be edited. I caught some mistakes in their. Anyway, great job, this definitely has the element of horror and fear. It's a good ...

Lamika As soon as the party reached the inn she opened the first door with a little silver key and sat down. "This is ours!" she mumbled, and Firego entered ...

Ok, so my poem is a parody of Lord George Gordon Byron's poem, the Destruction of Senacherib. (I hope I spelled that right.) We had to memorize it for school ...

Lamika "Perhaps you should," she said, almost amused at the scence around her. Boys. Firego also made as if to step in, but she stopped him and gave him a ...