Cabassi_Crime_Family

Jon bit his sleep , mind racing for an excuse to travel alone. He came up empty. Perhaps that was meant to be lip? Ahh, Very pleasent. Easy to read ...

Ciao Phorcys. Arbitrary hit from the CCF , ragazzo. Imp ressions, then, vero? You have a dense style, apt in metrics of description, certainly in the atmospheric. In more specific, ...

Dream The actual dream aspect is not what makes it cliche or not, it is more of the content of the dream. The dream does not appear as cliche. The ...

Winning the Battle by Jack. Lifesaver, that. Buona fortuna and if you have any questions, feel free. CCF

Ciao Sumi. Have you talked to Jack (Firestarter)? Credo che he's written an article on battles, and it was more than good; genius. But when it comes down to battles, ...

I was pleasantly surprised in reading this. At first glance I imagined I wouldn't like it, but I rather did. The rhythm is solid and the rhyming is simple, but ...

I'd honestly like to be able to agree with your claim that this is completely original, but frankly, I can't. You'd be surprised just how many poems there are about ...

Once again, your habit of capitalizing the first letter of every line detracts from this piece. You really need to break out of that persistence, amico . My ears will ...

A friendly *bump* Just reminding everyone we're still here. It would be most beneficial if this could be stickied.

It’s not as though I’ve done anything to her, thought Martha, edging down to sit on [s]the[/s] a branch and resting her cheek against the coarse bark. First off, you ...

Alright, once again present are the staccato line breaks and lack of punctuation. When combined, these elements can greatly detract from a poem's flow, and I'm afraid that that's true ...

Fluent Sliding melody Bellows thought through Sweet vibration Coerced by finger, Thumb and bow. Resonate, fine 'cello, With my passion freed By someone else's song That flows through Tainted arm ...

Ciao Sam - critique il secondo allora , to be precise. The previous may have put the definition of brevity in illustration. But then, Imp hit that one, yes? LETTERS ...

The CCF thanks you for your patiance. We have been going through your piece and assuring that we give you the best possible advice. It is my pleasure to inform ...

Ciao Kylan - come stai, ragazzo? Abastanza bene - a meno, spero di si. Here's your crit then. But let's start on a ground-floor level, so to speak, meaning: character ...