Cabassi_Crime_Family

I was born here, Seriously. I wont go into the details as they are quite graphic but I fall into one of the many YWS characters. Enjoy me :)

You told us a story, plain and simple. You severly lacked descriptions. I have not the foggiest idea what the character looks like or what any of the setting looks ...

It seemed rather rambled. Victims are witnesses. They have a choice to take the stand or not. They have to press charges in order for the case to even get ...

O_O OMG that Bunny has a safety pin in its eye! Oh your God, I love this. It's so cool. I'm really enjoying staring at it.

“Well, at least she gets pain killer s when this is all over. Do I get a shot of Morphine? Nope. I get a pat on the back and a ...

Overall it was fairly interesting. You need to expand on George more, he appears as a bit flat. Ike, however, seems far more developed. I dont know if I like ...

Standing on a crate, a boy peered in on the conversation[s],[/s] ; his eyes wide, pressed firmly against the crack in the door. Swearing inwardly at Mao, Booker wondered where ...

The general shap seems to be in order. Her mouth and right eye are lopsided however. The right side of her face seems a bit to far to the right ...

Los Angeles, California “Five[s],[/s] ! ” Booker Lee yelled, pointing the gun at the woman's head[s],[/s] ; his face stony. “You've got five seconds before your wife dies. And I ...

Ciao Kylan - credo che non hai pazenza? Eh? To the critique though. Let's begin on the straightforward. Brevity, it is said, is the soul of wit. It carries over ...

Your Date of request is August 10th. From: Kylan To: Cabassi_Crime_Family Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2007 12:48 am Subject: You have recieved a donation from Kylan Kylan has donated 50 ...

A cigarette dangled from the corner of Claude's mouth , [s]and[/s] smoke curled into the air, coalescing with the stifling gasoline fumes [s]oppressing[/s] inside the tent. He was hunched over ...

Outskirts of Riyadh, Saudi Arabia “Drone now in a holding pattern. We can pickle the target at any time, sir. I'm counting that the target has five or six SAMs, ...

Well done. A fitting end to the story. A very nice twist to the sandman story. Again, you could easily trim this down. There was nothing but his words, drenched ...

Intriguing, to say the least. I must first compliment you on your use of sentence structure and words choice to create a truly frightful adventure. There was a flutter above ...