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Hey, content-wise I really enjoyed your poem. I didn't get much of a setting which left a little confusion, but normally I wouldn't expect that from a poem this short ...

I'm probably not saying anything that hasn't been said already, but this is a great story on every front. I love the story itself, especially the way you integrated the ...

A 'Goldilocks' planet is a planet in a solar or galactic zone that can support life. (Earth is the perfect example of one of those 'Goldilocks' planets). I kind of ...

Again, this is probably more like a 14+ level from now on. I really focused on Esti and August for these chapters, and personally they were probably the most fun ...

Wow... you just bottled more emotion into a short story than most full-length novels. I have no idea how you captured a character that well, and I think my heart ...

This is definitely worth finishing, though I even think the current 'ending' is passable. Your rhymes are creative and interesting, though sometimes they do feel a little cumbersome. Maybe you ...

Really, really good. I liked the premise and you gave a whole new meaning to 'green-freak'. Because it's a short story you don't really see the characters that well... so ...

As a fan of dark comedies, I wasn't exactly sure what to expect when I started this. The premise seems just so out-there... but again it makes almost perfect sense. ...

Alright, the first two chapters of Part Two deal with the aftermath of the fake rebellion in London and how it particularly affects Michael Haley. I tried to take everyone's ...

I don't think there's anything I haven't said in a previous review yet, :smile: but I'll say again that this is really, really excellent. Your grammar though, it is off ...

Good job with the character development so far, and your dialogue is still spot-on. I'm getting a lot of feeling from the story, which is always good. And the flow ...

Wow. I really wasn't expecting this to be that good when I clicked the link. I'm not sure where to start, so I'll go with my rating system (I'm inventing ...

Thanks guys, I really appreciate the reviews. And as for the grammar... I'm working on it :wink:

Thanks for the feedback; I'll definitely consider everything you said while I'm writing the rest, though I'd like to leave this chapter the way it is at least for now. ...

Thanks for the review(s), and I will definitely fix up some of the things you pointed out. And like you said with the paragraph spacing, the thoughts were italicized but ...