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Hello, sparksflying. I will say that I liked this, it was slow starting but still kept me interested. I write Science Fiction too. You have a good ending, though the ...

No problem RenGrey. I'd be happy to help. Structuring and Planning can seem boring at first, but once you realize how beneficial it is, you will learn to love it. ...

Yeah I never used to structure either. I used to hate it. I felt it sucked the fun out of it, knowing everything that was going to happen beforehand. I ...

It sounds like a great idea, RenGrey. I've been writing since I was like 9, but I began writing seriously at age 12 and I'm now 18. So I count ...

Here I am to go through the rest of this chapter, phoenixwriter. I will start where I left off. I notice that you use speech tags with nearly all the ...

creativemuse1, it'd help phoenixwriter if you were to show how you could fix up the, chopped up sentences, you mentioned you saw. Give an example of one of them so ...

Yeah, Gamergirl, it helps me to visualize the setting that the characters are in and get a grip on how the scene would actually play out. And, nutmegan, I used ...

You don't write anything down on paper? I could never plan a story in my head alone.

Here's what I think, phoenixwriter. Silvia woke up with a start. With astonishment visible in her icy royal blue eyes, she threw off a small blanket that she was certain ...

It wasn't a disaster, but its your decision. :)

Wow, you've been writing this story for eight years? Long time. I've been working on a fantasy series for six years, and it'll be at least a couple of books ...

Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. :)

Well thank you, RenGrey. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review. And I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

Very thorough critique, Octave. It sums up everything I was trying to say, yet couldn't find the words at the time. :) This is good advice, Kyousuke. You should seriously ...

Hello, EtCetera. This is only a short piece with a lot of good content so I will take the time to do a detailed critique. You opened good. She was ...