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Thanks, Island6. The emotions is what some people have commented on. I'm working on it. :) Glad you liked it. :)

Thanks, BlackSheep. :) Yes I did intend her lips to look glossy. Haha.

cresent, thanks. The line of her neck is bendy on the left. It wasn't like that when I sketched it, but when i went over the pencil with gimp paintbrush, ...

Title of the novel I'm working on is, First Light. And it's Science Fiction. Overview of the whole story put as simply as possible: It's set on a pre-apocalyptic Earth ...

Yeah, Firewriter. Her hair is a bit faded. I wanted to add another layer or two to give it more depth, but I'm lazy. Haha. And, LittleLionWoman, her nose is ...

Well thanks. I would have shown more description with the senses, smells and sounds, but I had a word limit of 600 maximum and my teacher is all about 'compressing' ...

Hello, Island6. First of all, For the past two weeks, Evelyn Rose had been having terrifying nightmares. Every morning before the sun rose into the sky, she would wake up ...

I liked this very much, Leahweird. But, The whole first chunk of this piece is exposition and telling. You don't show enough of the actions. You just tell us about ...

Cohesion. Flow of the scenes and chapters. Pace, I tend to write fast paced action and inject the emotions and tension bit by bit. And the climax. I get to ...

This is, Alexis, she's the MainCharacter in a screenplay story of mine. Gist of the story is, the world uses robotic women as substitutes and fill in's for real women ...

This I wrote for a school assignment, 600 word short story. Hope you guys like it. :) Fire Starters A street lamp by the crossing buzzed, the light flickering. Kendal ...

Yeah I'm not too sure about that comma either. It feels like an action tag but looks like a speech tag, so I dunno how I should use that one. ...

Thanks, RenGrey. I appreciate the kind words. :)

“Window, open,” Ela said. She rubbed her eyes after being woken by a tune tapped on the window. She checked her bracelet, and neon blue digits displayed: 0058. “It’s 1am.” ...

Sparksflying, I hoped by now I'd be able to see something that would show me, this is futuristic, this is science fiction. Sci-Fi obviously doesn't need to be set in ...