Buddha

(Help!!! In the parentheses below where it says something, I need help thinking of a word. The original word was radiated but that sounds stupid.) Prologue... Shadows Twelve cloaked figures ...

I really liked this, the flow is very nice and your simple, straightforward way of describing the emotions really pulled me in. I'm not really good at critiquing poetry, nor ...

I didn't particularly like this chapter anyway; the story doesn't even get good at all until chapter.... four, I think. Which is very sad because I spent so much time ...

very good, once again, and better than the first.... you slowed down the pace just a bit and it really helped. Keep up the good work!!! (And once again... SLOW ...

pretty good... but it still moves too fast. The whole of the story Should have had enough detail to take up several chapters. Slow down!!!! “I think I know why,” ...

I thought it was pretty good, but yes, there were some spacing errors. You could probably do some grammar checking also and I was kind of confused about who was ...

:) gracias

Very good, but you need to move a little SLOWER. It hurts my brain to follow. Great plot line (though always a little dark with you!!) and pretty good detail... ...

I'll post the prologue soon. I forgot to do that first!!! It took me forever to do this chapter and then when I was done I went through and deleted ...

I thought it was pretty good. I liked the style of writing (I'm a biggie on writing style) and although there are some spelling errors I liked how you really ...

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