Bryn

Top me off. Until you've had your fill Let me show-off How a rhyme can kill. Your chest must be achy Cuz you wake n bakey Fall back, fall back ...

Hey Hey..You HAD me at the first stanza, the use of that simile as all I needed! I agree with rain. Very good imagery and you flow is nice too. ...

Hey Hey..You HAD me at the first stanza, the use of that simile as all I needed! I agree with rain. Very good imagery and you flow is nice too. ...

Yeah I'm going to work on it.. I think it can be something cool.. haha It was pretty late when I wrote it :) thanks everyone

Looking down the barrel of a shiny piece of steel. Malice in the eyes Of the one so very near. You wonder if they think about how you feel at ...

Hiii :) I was reading your poem -obviously haha- and I like it is was sort of its own little gem.. the last few lines are what got me.. very ...

I really like this, because I'm planning on going into the military. So it definitely sparked my interest, and I totally enjoyed it. I think the dialogue between Claire and ...

Wow! *applauds* very very nice. I wish you could have seen the pictures in my head as this unfolded. They were completely epic! Well I really have no critques at ...

I think I will continue reading this as you go, because it is interesting. I'm in agreeance(if that is a word) with your other reviewers except Butterflies opinion on your ...

Well not knowing much about Arthur and all these things you're writing about. I can give a review primarily on content and just that! :) Being a reader with no ...

Heyy. So I wanted to do a little spying on you to see your poetry and stuff, I couldn't resist. So it happens I really enjoyed it, and I'm going ...

Overall this poem is very pretty. The words come off to me as a little blunt, but it might just be the translation. and your heart is no longer afraid, ...

This post may be dead. So I'll be the end. Sit down and listen. Or get out of my kitchen. You both talk of your wisdom and going beyond. Go ...

Barely Eighteen This soldier, he died, barely out of his teens. So make sure to remember, he was only eighteen. So remember his memory, and pray for his soul, think ...

This was a very touching poem, that was easy to envision.your second to last stanza was my favorite, it gives the imagery that the rains washes your slate clean and ...