Bromthebard

Oh, my God, AMAZING, it was very descriptive, very detailed, and your use of words that are not in the average person's vocabulary amazes me. The fact that you have ...

First of all, very beautiful. The images you gave me were so vivid. We have a beautiful sky here. One for taking pictures, holding memories, forgetting, loving, then dying. , ...

Very cute. I do agree with the above comment slightly, it's not that you have too much dialogue, it's that you have too little of the other stuff, the amount ...

Very good, you got me hooked on the story. It flowed good, I really can't suggest anything about transitions. One thing is, though, “Good,” said the soldier. Now face the ...

This story is not written in a normal style, I wrote it in a more casual style. It is a little repetitive at first, but keep reading it gets better, ...

Wow, really good, I honestly can not find anything wrong with this work on first read. I suggest to keep going with this. I think if you finish this, and ...

As you've probably noticed, all the characters have the same names, this is due to the fact that I base my characters off of my friends, another point I want ...

Very good, your wording was great. I suggest putting more detail in it, though. I also suggest, somewhere in there, adding what is happening to the doctor during this, like ...

very good, lots of good details, good character development, you just need to keep going and finish the story I personally would do a fight in the story. Your a ...

I agree with what the other people said, it is a little too short. It needs to be longer with more of a plot and more details. But, what i ...

A very good story. It is very well constructed. It had a lot of details. I was amazed at your story. Keep writing and posting your stuff. You write better ...

I loved it! It had a lot of places where it brought back memories of me changing schools. I thought it was really good, keep writing. -Bromthebard

I like this, it is very, very random. Good idea though. Nice ending, killing the whale. -Bromthebard

I like this its short and beautiful. It has a lot of detail for something so short. Good ending, too. -Bromthebard :)

This is really good. You should think about writing some more historical fiction. -Bromthebard