BrokenSword

Currently, I can't detect much emotion from Erik. It's almost like the two are robots talking to each other with pre-programmed dialogue. This works as a formality for a little ...

I feel I must caution you on name choice. I find it easier to mix unusual names you can pronounce with maybe the one odd one that's a little more ...

I think I’m on adjective overload. The above is what I’d suggest. On the topic of the sword, you sometimes call it a blade, sometimes a pike, so I’m not ...

Thank you so much Amelia, I love getting detailed crits because when I re-read the chapter so many times I start missing some important things. I'm starting to notice I ...

Having sex is not just to make life. Okay? Using your logic, then it is also direspectful to use a condom, or be on the pill. Those aren't natural, and ...

This is actually a really good idea--I might use its services because there are some works I have done that have received no critiques and I'm a little bit frustrated.

The same goes for much heterosexual sex, and sexual acts. Why are you singling out homosexuals? Because when you have heterosexual sex, there is always a possibility for life to ...

CHAPTER 5 Chapter 1 Chapter 2 Chapter 3 Chapter 4 Over the next week, it was obvious that Sabah had become depressed after Erik’s angry outburst. She refused to carry ...

So, basically, you're going to go ahead and say that homosexuals should not be allowed to have sex, and only straight people should have that right? Yes, because homosexual "sex" ...

I find it amusing that you seem to think that homosexuals can not love. I do think that homosexuals love, but love is not just about sex. It doesn't work ...

I have absolutely nothing against people being proud of who they are. Nobody has anything against races having pride, why should sexual orientation be any different? Racial pride and sexual ...

Thanks for getting it back up!! :D

When you become mortal, you will eventually die.

Hmm...I very rarely torture more than one character. I do it mostly to help the reader connect more with the MC, to feel their pain, feel sorry for them and ...

Chapter 1 Chapter 2 Chapter 3 Erik watched his servant girl carefully as she helped him remove the bandages from his leg and set them aside on his bed. The ...