Brian

I hate to say this, but I don't get it. Maybe if I spent more than five minutes contemplating it I could, but I don't get what you're getting at. ...

This was pretty good! You need to do some proofreading (you got prior spelled as pryor in one part), but it's no biggie. You got good dialogue and a good ...

No extra words, no extra lines. Excellent descriptions, excellent prose.

Good flash fiction! But your grammar needs some work; you got a lot of comma splices in here. "Each breath seems to linger at the back of my throat and ...

I thought that this story was pretty interesting. I like your descriptions of the high priestess, and you do a good job of conveying the rebel movement against this lady. ...

I remember when my Christmas list was just Star Wars! I'm asking for a Nintendo DS for this Christmas. I was wary of it at first, but Mario Kart looks ...

I read a lot, and it's very rare that I read as intensely as I did with this one, or that I have a strange tensing senstation in my chest. ...

Really good. Didn't care for the last stanza and the line "Silence" though. They're both rather abrupt and seem to just detract from the poem. But, I liked it a ...

Sappy and mushy. A parent would love this, lol. Only had a problem with the first paragraph. Seemed rather mean and insulting, but I also don't know anything about you ...

Awesome! Only part I didn't like was the "Once upon a time" line. Other than that, loved it.

Grammatical corrections are in bold: When a friend tells you a secret, something which they could trust no one else with, you are naturally expected to keep it ; after ...

I'm going to start with the grammar. For poetry, you either use punctuation or you don't (with the exception of apostrophes). You can't choose to use periods, but not commas. ...

I liked it. Reminds me of War of the Worlds, though I know you meant World War II. You got really good descriptions, and there's a good feel to the ...

All debate in this forum is pointless. But, it's fun. Speaking strictly religiously, free will is just the rule that God will not interfere in human affairs. Going by that, ...

Your complete ignorance of what commandment is the one that says "Thou shalt not worship an idol" is enough to tell me you have no idea what you're talking about. ...