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Re: Turn Me Down
Oh I forgot! Sorry About the only think in this world, think should be thing.
Mar 23, 2011 -
Re: Skin
I liked it, but it felt like a child's book. Its needs more meat to be a poem.
Mar 23, 2011 -
Re: Turn Me Down
If these are suppose to be lyrics, you need a chorus. I'm going to look at it as a poem. It’s everything I knew, Everything but you. This part of ...
Mar 23, 2011 -
Re: Running From Myself
Hey! Okay, so let me start off by saying, you are a really good writer. Your descriptive with a hint of mysterious, the kind of things that keep people reading. ...
Mar 23, 2011 -
Re: I Danced With the Devil.
I Danced with the Devil. This is just basically an outline of the story im writing. I saved my self once, I refused help. I didn’t need drugs to save ...
Mar 19, 2011 -
Re: True Face and Bleeding Heart
Bleeding heart I would give up my life I would give up my bleeding heart but there is not much more for you to tear apart Just a lost girl ...
Mar 16, 2011 -
Re: Crumpled Towel Study
WOW. This is really good for 40 minutes. Its looks a bit like crumpled paper though. Maybe you should add more details to make it more towelish? I'm not a ...
Mar 16, 2011 -
Re: Flower painting
I've never painted anything before, but this is really beautiful. I love the shades,but you could make it a bit brighter to REALLY stand out. =p I love it.
Mar 16, 2011 -
Re: Keychain Doll
Ah, nothing showed up.
Mar 16, 2011 -
Re: Bits of bits.
One request, if you don't feel like reviewing all this please review the poems first. No Name Everyday I push thoughts of you away Everyday I hurt for those things ...
Mar 16, 2011 -
Re: The Sparrow's Nest
Hello! I'll read this poem and automatically thought it was great. It was fluent and spot on rhyming. When you grow up and fledge your wings Fledged is a bit ...
Mar 15, 2011 -
Re: Eyes of a stranger
You have amazing rhyming here. I mean you have it spot on. I love the poem, and I have tried writing a poem like this before. Its awesome! I have ...
Feb 15, 2011 -
Re: Doodles
Alright I did color them both on photoshop, but the ballet one didn't work out. The computer froze and I lost it when I had just finished.
Feb 12, 2011 -
Re: sometimes
Hey! First I would like to point out you need punctuation. Its hard to understand with out it. I also think you should get rid "you're" and actually right you ...
Feb 12, 2011 -
Re: Romeo and Juliet
Hand in hand Heart to Heart No command Love from the start Hate grown like a tree Love conquered that which could not be Tragedy sparked a fire Consumed in ...
Feb 10, 2011
