Young Writers Society

Hey SC, First you aren't clear on what you are talking about. Two these are lyrics, and go in the lyric section, and three you have some mistakes. Blood of ...

Hey AlyKat! I really only have a few suggestions. I don't really feel like you have a whole poem here. Maybe an outline for one... Alright you need to try ...

I remember that day I stopped believing in you. The waves rose high above me like your build had once done, picking me up with your broken dreams and pushed ...

I remember that day I stopped believing in you; As the waves whisked by, Like frosting on all those Birthday cakes you missed. That day I squished my toes Into ...

When I think back to that horrible day September. no period 11,2001 period I don't remember much, but I know many lives were lost period It was a beautiful day, ...

Hey Host! Just a short review here! Your lines are forced. Bit choppy as well. Thats all though. PM me or post on my wall if you have any questions! ...

Hello WrittenInStone! Alright! To start nice piece you have here! You have some really nice, flowing line here. It's exciting! My only suggestion is use personal pronouns! I feel like ...

I can see each passing second. The long comma black hands are pointing fingers, I can hear each passing second, it's a slow comma steady beat. pointing out how we ...

Oh Hey Booboo! Boo here. Alright WELL. Thin is a bit of a problem to review here. You need to realize that puncuation is an extremely important part of english, ...

Hey Urban! Here as requested. I only found a few mistakes, but I do have a suggestion. Although while you have a wonderful vocabulary in some places I feel like ...

Trembling I reach for his hand, tears poured from my eyes. It couldn’t be. It’s not true. Not him. Why wasn’t it me? I curl my fingers around his hand ...

This must be a night That runs on the fingers of time. Flying through the sky, And whispering in my ears. Spilling hated truths into my brain. Will tonight fall ...

E vening to dawn V ivid moments are dying, yet E veryone without you. R igid and scorned I’m waiting. L ies did fall from your perfect lips, this A ...

Hey Thestorygirl, First off one spelling mistake. Then the screams began; first high and peircing, Also I think this should be a semicolon. disbelieving. piercing Then gravity brought it all ...

Boo here! Hey Sara, I actually wasn't super happy about this story. First off felt more like a poem. It was repetitive and melodramatic. Scars don't bleed. Perhaps talk about ...