Boogie97

thanks! Will be sure to edit. I will also work on clarity and reading it aloud. :)

A LOT of meaning like sudichka said but i felt really calm and peacefull while reading this piece. Really good depth. loved it.

the second paragrah "MAKE A HOLE" the doctors.... you forgot the word said. the third paragraph.....The general was covered in blood but appeared to be unharmed, a doctor came up ...

The Sketch is amazing! Very detailed. good job:)

please give reviews and I will go to your page and review one of your stories.

I decided to take my work down because i am trying to delete my account. sorry!

you could have the story be sort of boring until the first party of the year and write about how the middle schooler's want to hang with the high schooler's ...