BohemeMistress

i like it. it's very interesting and i'm pretty sure i haven't seen it before. It's very creative, good job:)

Great dialoge and a beautiful flow to it! I absolutely loved the idea, and it was very powerful. I really enjoyed it!

porkchop

Shrubary (sp?)

i liked it, and i also agree--i happen to be a fan of talking to the reader. However, here's my critic: "You want to know what happened? You don’t even ...

I really liked this, i thought it was short and sweet! I feel like it really conveyed an emotion, i can't really say which, but i felt it! i thought ...

Thanks, like i said this was only the base of my idea, i'm planning on adding a lot to it. thanks for the feedback!

Wow, Vamp. i don;t even know how to go about criticing it! i like it! I had to read it twice to take it all in, unique approach!

very thought provoking! if you could, PM me and tell me what inspired this! i really like it, it's very outside the element.

Removed due to publication.

I live in Canada (like your teacher, i guess) and we don't recite our national anthom, but we do have to stand. I've never personally sat through it, but I ...

I really like it, your use of neon, and contrasting it with eternal darkness is very provokative! i absolutely love the flow, but i must say i agree about the ...

Removed. Sorry.

wow, the first one made me cry (in a good way...i LOVED it) and the second one left me awestruck! amazing!

Deleted. I removed this because I wrote and posted it over three years ago and no longer want it on the internet. Also people seem to be shocked and scared ...