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Town of Dissident Act I: Scene V (Scene opens on Adam climbing into a barred carriage. The door is shut by an armed soldier. He locks the door with a ...

"It's okay, Lyra. I know that you're afraid. You don't know if you should either fear me or to accept that I'm here. But you don't have to say a ...

There is just something about the turmoil and longing in that book that kept drawing me in. (shouldn't this be keeps?) Today was September thirteenth, or in other words, my ...

SKETCHING! I love this style of drawing, you're an artist with the capabilty I never had. You must continue drawing flowers. This artistic skill makes me HOTTER THAN JULY!

A little cliche, but to tell you the truth I've always laughed at the people who keep saying the world ends tomorrow, or who wants it to end. Not to ...

Town of Dissident Act 1: Scene IV Characters involved: Kanen- town affairs supervisor. Governor- man appointed to supervise the area. (Scene fades in on the Governor scanning over an array ...

Awesome, I love Harry Potter! :D I'll make only one suggestion. Work on your character dialogue. The meaning of the words is easily understood, but you need to develop each ...

"You have trained well, I would rephrase this sentencing. It sounds cliche. Very cliche. Was this another of Whiteraven's jokes? Maybe replace the word jokes with riddles. Riddle is more ...

My hands found each other immediately, the left one trying to strangle out the pain that was torturing me from the opposite wrist. What hand met what wrist? My hands ...

Town of Dissident Act I Scene III Characters mentioned/ involved: Kanen Soldier Adam (Scene opens on Kanen, a tall, dark muscular man, walking quickly through a moist torch lit brick ...

Snoink, you are a very experianced writer. At least, very ahead of me, but just keep up the work. You're doing great with the characters, personnalities, and matching the perfect ...

Puck: Hey! What have you been doin’ over the summer? if he's going to have an accent why not put it to the extreme or not make them have an ...

Town of Dissident Act I Part II Characters brought up: Kas- Brindel’s daughter. Brindel- Kas’ father. Kanen- Supervisor of tow affairs. (Scene opens on a small bedroom, a girl in ...

Make sure you provide more detail with the past. I would recommend plugging in more of the time setting, more info about the main character (personnel details about them), and ...

It's a little cliche, but here is one reason why I find this to be so. Your attitudes need to become more seperate. When you read Harry Potter they don't ...