Blossom

Hey, I love this poem and I reckon that as a song it would be awesome too! I don't really have any suggestions, mainly just appreciation that you wrote it ...

Hey, Thanks Matt, for the advice! I agree that the colour was a bit distracting so as you can now see I have changed it. Also, my spelling errors have ...

You remind me all the time. Every time I stand on the edge, every time play I with the devil but I know I'm young, and yes I know my ...

Hello!!! I love your idea for the poem because not only is it original but also interesting. I agree with Elinor Brynn with the point that certain things called be ...

Hello, You provided an interesting perspective and I found it very captivating. The only thing I didn't really understand was the line: But I care but I will always care. ...

Hello! This poem is OK, but I just feel that you could have explored the emotions a bit more and added more to it. It was really quite simple and ...

How am I supposed to dream, when like a bug I hide in the corner, as I've only ever learned to play safe? How am I supposed open my eyes, ...

Hi! This poem, in all it's heartbreak, really ins't that capitvating as your lack of poetic devices prevent you from exploring other amazing and gripping worlds apart from the cliche ...

Hi! I enjoyed the poem but I have to agree with Galerius on the point that you have sacrificed vital poetic devices such as imagery, metaphors and similes e.c.t, in ...

When Sleeping... Your conscience drifts away, Your breathing slows to the speed of peace, Your mind unravels like an ancient scroll and the true essence of what lies in you ...

Loved the emotion and expression you used throughout the entire piece. Don't really have any advice because it all worked for me. I also loved how the tone changed in ...