Blossom

Hey, I liked this poem. The ideas were really good and you explained them well. The only thing I disliked was the last line as it kind of just ended ...

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Every breathe I breath is empty. The depth of my stomach feels utterly hollow. I suffocate as I inha

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Wow this is an awesome poem!!! I'm assuming it's lyrics and with a cool tune this poem would be even

Hey, This is a really good poem. I love the way you have depicted the lives of people from a houses perspective. The poem flows really well and you have ...

Hi! This is a sweet poem and like the way you have begun each stanza with Dear god, My only issue is the flow of the poem as sometimes your ...

Hello, Pretty good poem, especially if you haven't written much. I like the idea mainly because it is unique and that provides a special kind of interest for readers. Well ...

Testing and luring my weakness, the memories still torment me. The tedious repetition of images flashing across my mind blinding me, tainting my vision of life. My dreams are like ...

I agree with the first two reviews on the point that your poem was a bit 'loose.' In order to captivate readers poems need to include a range of poetic ...

Hey, This is a very interesting poem. You have used words cleverly and this makes the poem even more dynamic. Well done. -Blossom

Hello, It was a very sweet poem but at the same time, obviously very sad. I like how you mention 'death.' Often people avoid saying that sort of stuff and ...

Hi-ya :) That's a really interesting idea for a poem and I like it. It's a bit scattered and changes direction to soon sometimes and that destroys the flow which ...

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Hi-ya! Good poem but it's just a little simple. My favourite line is actually the heading so great job there. The main thing I would suggest is to try to ...

WOW! Not only do you have a gift but you know how to use it. I expect one day you will be a song-writer and i'll be listening to every ...

WOW! This poem is really awesome. It all seems to fit together and still have meaning. If it were to be a song I could imagine it being Taylor Swift ...