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Re: passenger seat
Omg you are amazing! Thats all I have to say. -Blossom :)
Dec 12, 2011 -
Re: A Geisha Girl
You asked for no more comments but I couldn't help myself!! :P all i'll say is that it is so pretty! :) -Blossom xx
Dec 5, 2011 -
Re: Searching for colours
Narrow-minded I shall never be; black and white I won't ever see through. Grey inbetween many find comfort; but I cannot live in such a misty haze. I search for ...
Dec 2, 2011 -
Re: The Flight
Absolutly amazing! I honestly mean it when I say this is the best piece of work I have read on this site! You had me glued from the beginning and ...
Dec 1, 2011 -
Re: You Drove Me Insane
Wow! This is great :) and you say it is your first poem so that makes me even more impressed! You ability to compose with rythme is shown and certainly ...
Dec 1, 2011 -
Re: Tranquility in time...
Subdued by the haze of misery, with a heart clamped to the longing of love, you sweard you couldn't fight it. You hoped so mountain high, as you heard her ...
Nov 30, 2011 -
Re: a winter without you
Very good! You should be proud of your work :) I'm not an expert with this so I don't really have any worthwhile advice- just know that I definitly enjoyed ...
Nov 30, 2011 -
Re: pavements
HI! Nice poem you have here :) The last two lines I found particularly gripping- very clever! The rythme was good and it is clear that you have your own ...
Nov 30, 2011 -
Re: A Void
Hi! Great poem! I particularly admired your vocabulary which you used wisely, adding emphasis to your most defining lines, supported with a bit of light and shade in you sentence ...
Nov 29, 2011 -
Re: 16 and realising...
[i]Half this age, I was captivated by the simplest of things, with only monsters under the bed to fear. Double this age, I suspect life will just pass me by, ...
Nov 28, 2011 -
Re: She'll Wait at the Window
Hey! Love the poem! Is a great idea and was sad in a sort of breath-taking way. My advice- you should find an alternative word for 'world'- it kind of ...
Nov 17, 2011 -
Re: Goodbye to Goodbyes
HEY! This is a good poem- I like the concept! 'Goodbye to Goodbyes'... certainly a thought-provoking title. One thing I would like to advice you on is to not use ...
Nov 17, 2011 -
Re: Where there be an angel
Halo send me down, let the light of this daydream leak to the ground. May the tranquility of my stream of memories pave me a path to serenity. It seems ...
Nov 16, 2011 -
Re: What I See Behind the Masquerade (Intro)
Before you continue reading this you should know that this piece isn't a novel nor a sequence of short strories, but more a written interpretation of the world I inhabit. ...
Feb 20, 2011 -
Re: This one's for the girls...
The ideas behind your storyline is interesting but your communication of it is a bit to casual. You need to either phrase everything in a poetic form or have it ...
Feb 19, 2011
