Blinkasy

Great start and I would say I loved it, but I think that understatement has already been repeated too many times. The scene of death being nothing, but a black ...

I enjoyed this, it kept me hooked. Lots of people have critiqued this already and I'm not going to try and improve on that. Short piece so this is going ...

Ok, i'm gonna try and keep this short. Blue is for commenting, red for corrections. Studious children Do you mean children who like to study? Sounds a bit fussy and ...

A serf is usually means a servant or slave, a much more interesting alternative i think. Like instead of saying magician you could say mage, magi or warlock. :)

This part of a story that i am about a third of the way through. I will write more depending on the reviews i get and whether people like the ...

My faces quickly turns from a slightly tanned peach to a sickening pale white. Should be face. Worst of all my hazel green eyes burn into a fiery red..........I am ...

OK i know there has been a lot of work already done on helping you and it is all great to see reviewers. This is just a quickie of a ...

Once upon a time someone once said to me that only those who meet their death in glory are remembered. That was a time when men still believed in honor, ...

First off I would like to thank you for the reviews, they came much quicker than I expected. Thanks for the comments which I have read and made appropriate changes ...

*Edited* The piercing wind whistled as it passed through the foggy streets of London, carrying with it the cries of a wailing baby and the stale stench of the overflowing ...