Blank_Ink

There will be no noise tonight, Just the sweet nothings of your harmonic breath. These last two lines bother me. In and of themselves, they're very good. I wish I ...

Kind of reminds me of "10 Things I Hate About You", when she's actually reading the poem. Your rhyming really doesn't have a pattern. Some lines rhyme, while others don't. ...

When you come, I say, "I want to fly away, above you" And you look and nod and understand.

I don't know if you'd just rather not use punctuation, or you're just lazy. But I know that in some pieces, not punctuating correctly is done on purpose. I myself ...

I sit, a Disney Princess coloring book on my lap. "Dear God... Once, I wanted to be a princess. Truly? I still do. Maybe you could lend me your shiny ...

I love your descriptions of the boy. Do you ever just sit in a corner and observe people, write tidbits about their appearances and mannerisms? If you don't and you ...

Originally, it had great breaks and spacing in the lines, but it didn't transfer over when I copied it. I know I really should go back and fix it. Hopefully ...

I absolutely love this! The last line ties the entire poem together. Great job. I love the idea of her seeing her own coffin, and of how he "killed" her. ...

I never knew what to say. Tyler was such a hard person to get through. But there was always constant conversation- unless, of course, we were fighting or too lost ...

The story has potential. I love the agony of it- as weird as that may sound. I do agree with Amelia's post. The best writers have the gift of making ...

I feel like it ended too soon. Also, the rhyming scheme, or lack there of, kind of had me confused. Was it a rhyming poem or not? There was no ...

I really love this. It totally has potential for a longer story, but I love it how it is. Your style is amazing. It flows so well! Good job.

I felt like the entire poem was leading up to a climax that didn't happen. I enjoyed all except the last two lines. I really do think it just ended ...

I actually really like it. It reminds me of a passage I read in a book one time, but for the life of me I have no idea what book, ...

So, I'm Kelly. I have some fantasy about becoming rich off of my writing in the future, but don't we all? I really do not like people that say, "I'm ...