Bladesmith

Some very powerful description>>> me likes. I am most certainly interested in how your concept of magic will develop in the future (the part about being aware of the ruined ...

this is... intriguing. This could be easily turned into a novel. Definitely a lot of potential and unanswered questions. You seem to have set the stage for a novel that ...

You've set up an interesting situation with her mother and the rest of her family. I like this and can sympathize with her mother abusing her. To be brutally honest ...

well done. Personally I would have not had them outline exactly where (what floor, etc.) they would be escaping by. I think that it could help contribute to the dark ...

So far this is turning out to be an awesome story. You did a great job of keeping the action up in part 2 to keep the reader hooked. When ...

Just clearing something up. I will admit i'm a weapons freak (yes i have a forge, anvil, etc. and make my own swords). You said "needle sharp" point of the ...

The beginning is good, very good. Nice powerful description (reminds me of the way old legends tell of monsters). The end though is definitely a case of telling and not ...

I will be completely honest. You just made my day. I just finished watching Inception again before i logged on and read this. Dreams! (enough said i think). Other than ...