Blacklemon67

Wow! Lots of praise and good constructive criticism. I realize now the info-dumping is a real problem. Also the storyline is a bit unorganized in later chapters as I decided ...

And then Linus went through the battle field, completely unaffected. Just kidding. I like the surrealism of the story, though I think it could use some beefing up. Currently I ...

-- Sorry if I wrote too much =P Chapter 1 An icicle is an easy thing to get rid of. But three hundred frozen knives similarly connected to a four ...

Interesting premise you have here. The neo-surrealist narration style at the beginning left me confused yet drew me in at the same time. You do have some small issues with ...