Bittersweet

I'm not quite sure what to say. kittykat pretty much summed it up. Wow. You're an excellent writer. I loved every bit of this piece. It went in so deep--it ...

I pretty much agree with everything ashleylee had to say. The beginning was a little confusing. The transition from childhood to adulthood could have been smoother. There are a few ...

Okay, first things first. We need to get through all of the writing mistakes and stuff. “Stop, you can’t heal him,” A voice came behind me. I turned on my ...

First, I'd like to say that this is an excellent piece of writing. Second--you really need to somehow seperate each character's part of the story with either a line break ...

I edited it, but I'm not sure if it's any better... My punctuation is probably still improper for poetry. Thanks so much to the both of you for your advice! ...

Infinitely impressed. I've been reading a lot of things on here and nothing compares to this! Wonderfully written; I felt my stomach flipping out when it got to three. It ...

A great big ship, sails torn and tattered from battle. Imagine cannon balls flying, piercing the canvas sky. Water slapping against, the water-worn wood. Rough and splintered, like the men ...

It's sounding pretty good. I'm not sure if it's the kind of story I would like to read. Seems a bit... cruel.

I'm curious to get to know the relationship between Emilie and Phillip. The scandals are probably a no-brainer, of course, with the baby thing. I'm mildly interested. It has potential, ...

This a pretty cute poem. I always love these romantic poems... a breath of fresh air sometimes, a break from all those depressing poems. What I really like about it ...

Just to say--left-handed people, please please don't take offense or anything. You know, it could have happened. Actually, this sort of did; people used to think that if their children ...

The sound of horse hooves pounding on moist soil roared through the quiet town, bouncing off the rural manors and abundant trees, yet fading as quickly as it had come. ...

It has my username in it!!! Ahem. Anyway, this is pretty good. Some parts are a bit apathetic, and kind of confusing, but I mostly catch the drift of what ...

I like this poem. At first I was like "Who is this airhead?" lol. No offense. But as I read, I really liked it. It's pleasantly confusing--those kinds of poems ...

It's amazingly descriptive. I hope I don't sound like an idiot or a jerk by saying this, because it seems no one else thinks this, but I don't really see ...