Bittersweet

Wow. This is really good! I really like the personality in it. You know exactly how he feels and your heart goes out to him. Sorry, I'm kind of in ...

Hey, [aka] eliza! Welcome! This is a nice piece of writing. A bit short, a bit blunt, but I like it. Probably because I can totally relate to the character. ...

Yoho yoho! Second review! Woot woot! Okay, here we are now... an old lady even patted him on the head, smoothening his unruly blonde curls and smiling at him Er... ...

-waves at Saint Razorblade, but feels just slightly awkward about the violence with the fish- xD -waves at Amblur' enthusiastically but stops midwave to eye twitch- Anywhoo, I would like ...

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Okay. I edited some parts, trying very hard to keep in mind what the two of you said. I'm not sure if it's any better. PM if you have any ...

Hello, I must say I liked this poem. It may have helped a little to have read your story first, but I do like the fantasy prospect. It gets a ...

Nice nice nice! This was an excellent poem. Your words are beautiful and (oh, this sounds cheesy, but) magical. They weave together nicely, and create lovely pictures in the reader's ...

Well... I have nothing really original to say. It was overall a very nice poem that people like me, who have moved from a place they loved very much, can ...

Hello! I'm just gonna jump right in... Children silent, unpicked violet. Scalded tongue and tension violent. You should probably change violet in here to another flower. The closeness between 'violet'

Hello! Okay, first off, I'd like to say that these few lines... You can't see them, but you hear. They can't hear you. Do they see? ...are kind of awkward ...

It's pretty good--you definitely captured each of the characters' personalities well. The thing that bugs me is when is this happening? Why has Jacob been unhappy for so long? Where ...

I wasn't sure if I wanted to continue writing this story, so I wanted to see what everyone thought. Addie’s breath was shivery as her eyes groped through the velvety ...

Kind of sounds like you're on something... 6/10 I enjoy pantsing Jackie Chan.

I like this. :) After reading the Twilight series, I always wondered how being a child and a vampire would be. I like the way you tell it; it's very ...