BigBadBear

Heh, awesome, as always. Upon waking, Joseph discovered that the bed on the other side of the room which was so recently occupied was now empty. Light was pouring in ...

Hey, Holly! I printed this out and made some marks on it. I didn't find very many errors, which is good for you. It was an odd thing crying over ...

Hello, and welcome to YWS. Before I critique this, I want you to know that you are supposed to critique (or read and review) two stories/poems before you submit one ...

This is a perfect ending for a perfect story. Ugh. I really wish I had time to do a proper critique. I have to get going to church right now, ...

Hello. I agree with Avens Dolor. From this part: Take heed children, for dark times lie ahead of us. Earth stands upon the brink of destruction; I can see the ...

[s]This looks really interesting. I can't critique it right now, but please rate this R because it has the 'f' word in it. As soon as I get home, I'll ...

Penguin, Just when I thought that everything had been written about, along came this masterpiece. Yes. It's a masterpiece. I love it so much. I want to glug it to ...

No. I actually believe that the repitition really worked. The only thing that I would do is place everything in order. It will make sense. Think of it like this. ...

Hey!! Suz, I'm so sorry that I forgot about this. Seriously. I told you I would critique this what? three days ago? I think so. I'm terribly sorry. VINCE: From ...

“NOOOOO!” he groaned. No. Just no. Simply no. You cannot and should not use caps to determine yelling. And stretching the 'no' out with more 'o's makes this sound very ...

Kylan, I love this story. I read like up to the third chapter and then I saw that you posted a re-write. Let's have a look? “This is urgent. Just ...

I echo the guy above me. This was terrific (but when is it not?). I'm really loving the characters. I love the way that you are setting it up - ...

Jabber! After that amazingess critique you left me, you deserve this more than anything. I lurve you! A gunshot got Kingsley’s heart pounding against his chest. A gunshot got Kingsley's ...

Haha. Man, Sam, I love you, first of all. So much. I wanna squeeze you till your amazingness covers me. Okay. Now that that is taken care of, there was ...

Hey Kylan! This was amazing, as always. It really was. There was one sentence that bugged me a little bit. I think you're being just a little too scientific here: ...