BigBadBear

Hello, and welcome to YWS. Before I critique this, I want you to know that you are supposed to critique (or read and review) two stories/poems before you submit one ...

This is a perfect ending for a perfect story. Ugh. I really wish I had time to do a proper critique. I have to get going to church right now, ...

Hello. I agree with Avens Dolor. From this part: Take heed children, for dark times lie ahead of us. Earth stands upon the brink of destruction; I can see the ...

This sounds interesting; I'll do it.

[s]This looks really interesting. I can't critique it right now, but please rate this R because it has the 'f' word in it. As soon as I get home, I'll ...

- Character development! It's the whole point I wrote this, and I *need* to develop different voices. - The therapist part. *Very* bad. (So stick it out - it does ...

Penguin, Just when I thought that everything had been written about, along came this masterpiece. Yes. It's a masterpiece. I love it so much. I want to glug it to ...

This seems like a really interesting story. I would most definitely read it. Is it totally complete? It sounds insanely awesome. I love the twist at the end. He goes ...

This is part 2/7 of the Séance series. If you want this to make sense, I recommend you read The Séance . I hope you like it. A/N: Ouija is ...

Aaaannnd. Why is this rated R?

The one you think it is. Why is dirt brown?

This is a really nice looking tree. I think it was cleverly taken. There are only a couple things that I can critique on. I don't think I've ever critiqued ...

Hey, there! You have an awesome name. ;) I love it. Welcome to YWS! I know that you'll just have a blast on this site. As everyone else has said, ...

No. I actually believe that the repitition really worked. The only thing that I would do is place everything in order. It will make sense. Think of it like this. ...

I've read the first 50 pages. The little sign things that are like this: ******DESCRIPTION OF GIRL*********** Really bug me. I don't understand them. I guess it's just the author's ...