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Re: The Question of Help
First off, ditch the second paragraph. "Haha, not!" is not working for this piece. The main problem with this is I think the tone needs to be formal. Right now, ...
Jul 20, 2008 -
Re: The House of Straw
Hey, Kylan! I'm sorry, I only have time to critique the first scene. I have to get going, but I just wanted to leave my two cents. It was done ...
Jul 20, 2008 -
Re: What Do You Love About YWS?
My friends. I can't live without them, or with them. 'o' -Jared
Jul 20, 2008 -
Re: IT part 1
Hello! Welcome to YWS! It's a rule here that we don't post one of our stories until we have at least reviewed two things. Please do that and then you ...
Jul 20, 2008 -
Re: Abkhazia, Resolute (3)
Sam, You suck. -Jared PS: How come you write so awesomely? You make all of the rest of us writers look terribly lame. I bow before your awesomesauce presence. Ooh! ...
Jul 20, 2008 -
Re: The Dark Knight
Holy crap. That's all I have to say about this movie. -Jared
Jul 20, 2008 -
Re: Daemon
I'm not entirely sure why BigBadBear said the piece's meter was perfect, because I didn't hear any... I don't generally use any particular meter, I can't... it's just not how ...
Jul 20, 2008 -
Re: A small series of Autumn themed haiku
Red apples drop where worms infest happily. Steep corners where witches fly. You say 'where' twice. >.> You already know that I love these poems. They are terrific. -Jared
Jul 19, 2008 -
Re: Big Bad Bear
Hey! This is my first post ever in artwork, and I know that this really isn't that good, but this is me. Or... what I would look like in Bear ...
Jul 19, 2008 -
Re: Daemon
Well. That was frightening. You had some major comma issues though. The daemon claws, [nix this comma] at the closed door, Gurgling noises escaping from her mouth. I hear her, ...
Jul 19, 2008 -
Re: The apocalypse!
Duh. Weren't you guys there when it happened? The calender maker quit because his hand hurt too much. He didn't want to go on any further. I saw it happen. ...
Jul 19, 2008 -
Re: Forever rewrite chapter 1
Alizz, This was a pretty good start. It’s been done to death though. I’m not really one to read all of this angsty teen things. As long as this steers ...
Jul 19, 2008 -
Re: Speedwrite the word above you!
heart
Jul 19, 2008 -
Re: Sarah
Holy crap. Holly. This. Is. Ultra. Epically. Amazing. No crappin' you. I love it. You are such a fantastic artist! You should submit this to like... I dunno. An art ...
Jul 19, 2008 -
Re: What is the member above you known for?
Known for writing a kick butt musical with me. -Jared
Jul 18, 2008
