BigBadBear

XD That was funny. The flow is brilliant. You have painted exceptional paintings into my head with the wonderful description. The word choice was utterly amazing! And the rhyming...oh gosh! ...

Wait... Don't leave! You just haven't had the chance to settle in. Don't leave. Please? There are loads of people that are more than willing to help you out. If ...

Hm... This is rather good. Your descriptions are good, and the only thing that was wrong with it was the Sean: "How long have you been standing here for?" Maid: ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS, although you are hardly new. Joined in October, eh? Haven't been on much? Anyhow, this is a good beginning. There isn't very much to critique because ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS. I know that you'll love it here. I'm BBB, Bigbadbear, or Jared. Whatever floats your boat. You write lyrics, eh? *have tried but fails miserably* So...if ...

Ok, well I decided to update with any plot changes or anything. xD And, I might need some help. Ok, for any of you out there, in Chapter Four I ...

Hey! This is the next part of that one chapter I read, where the guy went to India, right? Cool! Awesome. Amazing. Spectacular. I loved it. There weren't any mistakes ...

Thanks guys. Kazdrea - I understand what you are talking about. I researched the Great Depression and found out that it sort of got worse in the 30s. So, do ...

Well, this was really good. One little thing though: "It feels way to loose," said my mother, giving the woman a smile that didn't reach her eyes." to = too. ...

Well, I can't determine the gender. I'm thinking it's a boy, but if it is s/he is extremely...how should I put it...not straight? Long brown hair and blue eyes. XD ...

Nope. Lyre is a guy. He is Arnold's best friend in Vryheid. (Lyre isn't a real person. He only exists in Vryheid. Some people get that mixed up.) Thanks for ...

Well, I just updated Frequency. Here is the link for Chapter Two: Any comments would be much appreciated! BBB

Thanks Kylan. Anyway, here is Chapter Two: Chapter Two Arnold awoke to Papa’s slamming of the door. His eyes jerked open and his heart started to race. He gripped his ...

Argh...I don't wanna feel selfish, but I haven't really gotten any constructive feedback on this. Any advice would be helpful! ^ (Frequency)

Thanks guys. I'll be posting the next chapter sometime tomorrow! BBB