BigBadBear

That was really good, Jabber. You made it seem really realistic. Since you are the grammar expert, I couldn't pick up on any grammar issues, so I guess I only ...

Thanks for all of the crits and stuff. Jabber, you have truely saved this story. thanks you a bazillion for finding that there were Prime Ministers in the 1800s. You ...

Ow I stopped at 400 and now I feel like throwing up. Xp

I voted the last one because I think you should combine all three together. Something like this: Girl has a dream of the Kingdom. It seems so real; and then ...

(Why did you post this in fantasy? This is a poem...)

omg u r lyk not a vry gud writer. XD Priceless. Anywho, *sorry if I repeat anything that the other's have said. I haven't read theirs because I have to ...

cool! Well, I usually don't read poetry because it bores me, but this didn't. And I was surprised at how descriptive you were. *tries desperately to find something wrong with ...

Hey! Thanks for submitting guys! Ok, here are the people who I have critted: - Ayra - zankoku_na_tenshi - chocoholic - Lindsaroo - AWritersFantasy - gadi - Sureal - Wiggy ...

Wow. How terribly sad... “The Cheetos weren’t for me,” he continued. “Amanda, my wife, just has this fetish for them. Ever since our first date when I found out how ...

Hehe. That was funny. Well, I haven't read any of the other comments because I'm running a little short on time, but I want to say this: THIS STORY ROCKS! ...

Hey! This was MUCH better than the prolouge. I really liked this. It was action packed and fun. Now, to answer some of your questions: Oh! One more thing. I ...

Hey! Sorry it took me so long to finally get to this! Ok, when I first read this I thought, "Wow. This was pretty good. I want to read more." ...

You play violin and piano too? That's awesome! I love to play those! *ahem* Hey! Welcome to YWS! I'm BBB, bigbadbear or Jared. Whatever floats your boat. As the others ...

Holy cow. You have a lot of crits on this. So, for the sake of not being repetitive, I won't point out any grammar stuff. Well, that was... different. XD ...

Sorry it took me so long! I like to crit short chapters, then I'll move to longer ones. So... yeah. You didn't need to know that: You have a very ...