Bickazer

Oh! Argh! You're right! >_> How come I never notice stuff like that? Crud...I've got to fix that (but what would be a suitable substitute for "Castle"?) Darn. If you're ...

Thanks so much for the review! :) I really appreciate objective looks at my work. And this is making me feel odd, because I HATE this prologue. Really. With a ...

La la la~! Double post is double post is bad! Well, too bad, I'm doing it anyway, as I've got the final 2.5 pages of the prologue. And if you're ...

Thanks so much for the critique! :) And you're right about the opening sentence--quite simply, I hate it too. The fact that I start off the whole epic with an ...

It is more gramatically correct; the only time when you're supposed to just put an apostrophe after the word is if it ends in s, and even the Struck & ...

Yes, yes, yes, that is MUCH better. I got a much better feel for the characters this time, and the prose seems much better (i.e. less sparse) than it was ...

And rather then being rivals Ash and Krill genuinely hate each other with a passion. Well, okay, but does Krill have any redeeming features? It's things like this that make ...

Yeah, the first chap will be in the present. But the entire epic--six books' worth--will cover...approximately twenty-six years, I think. Ergh, it's been so long since I've worked on the ...

Yeah, well...I did mean for the prologue to be kind of vague and have a mysterious air to it--as it actually takes place around eleven years before the actual events ...