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Wow...that was just...fascinating. I haven't read the other stories in this series (100? Wow, that's ambitious; I wish I had that sort of dedication) but this has definitely piqued my ...

There's an unwritten YWS etiquette that stories should only be posted in increments of two thousand words or so. In the future, I suggest you stick to that rule. This ...

Thanks so much for the critique! :D I have no idea why, but for some reason while I was reading through your critique I just started...giggling insanely. I have no ...

Well, anyway, I'll get a-cracking on fixing the prologue soon (hopefully; a part of me is wondering at my hypocrisy at working on a project I proclaim is dead while ...

Thanks for the suggestions, but the problem here is that "Castle" is a kind of a brand name in this story, like Lamborghini or VAIO or it really wouldn't be ...

No no, I didn't mean the review as an incovenience, I meant me breaking off midway... Well, I'm back from shopping (for parents are hosting a party tomorrow and they've ...

A clear water droplet trickled down the window panel at a fast pace. This sentence intrigued me untilt he "at a fast pace" part. I don't know why, but...that just ...

This is a short story I wrote because the idea demons rudely bit me in the butt yesterday when I was in the shower. Not that I completely came up ...

You already said you are trying to cut down on your wordiness. I have the same problem. Here's an example for you of how I would edit a sentience to ...

Alex sat in the church pew, fingering his cross in the darkness. It was always dark now. He only woke at night, his body switching instantly to a new time ...

Oh! Argh! You're right! >_> How come I never notice stuff like that? Crud...I've got to fix that (but what would be a suitable substitute for "Castle"?) Darn. If you're ...

Thanks; I thought long and hard on it (no, I didn't). Actually, I agonized for a VERY long time about where it should be a "cycle", a "series", a "sequence", ...

Aww, I understand completely. It's the same reason why I puttered out on the Zenith Cycle, I think...you know what you WANT to write, but you just can't execute it. ...

Tentatively called "A Recording of the Mysterious Occurences Surrounding Thomas Dinker", or an equivalent title just as long and officious-sounding. I'm terrible at titling, so consider this tentative

Thanks so much for the review! :) I really appreciate objective looks at my work. And this is making me feel odd, because I HATE this prologue. Really. With a ...