Bickazer

This seems really neat, and it looks like you give good critiques, so! The only problems is that...I've got several things I'd like to have looked at. >_> Ugh. We~ell, ...

And by soon, I mean now. This is awful, double posting, but...>_> Here it goes, part two of chapter one: ----------------------- “Really, now.” Corseley sounded skeptical, and it wasn’t hard ...

Hahahaha - does "BHM" stand for Big High Master? Or am I waaay off? :P Sorry, I couldn't help it - just when I saw BHM I immediately thought of ...

Alsana was shocked by the news. Well...this is a major example of telling instead of showing. It's not a good sign when the very first sentence of your epic fantasy ...

Yes! Finally! Sorry, I shouldn't be too eager, should I...? >_> But really, I was looking forward to this A LOT. All I can say is--excellent job. I can really ...

Whoo hoo, let's see~! This time, I know Riley's a girl. And I do apologize for my faux must wound the writer deeply when a reader mistakes the gender of ...

Thanks for the critique! I'm really glad you pick through it line by line--it's just more thorough and definitely (ergh...adverbs...) helps me improve my prose better than general comments do. ...

One Hundred Years of Solitude, by Gabriel Garcia Marquez. It was the very first book to EVER inspire a physical reaction from me--and not nausea. As I read the ending, ...

The Zenith Cycle characters, since I seem to have taken that up as my epic project again...*sigh* "I wish for my Master to be my Master again....not the person he ...

I definitely like these two new characters as well, both are very likable. I like how well their opposite-ish personalities bounce off each other, they were really believable as individual ...

Here's the rest of the story. Again, I apologize for length issues, but I feel chopping this story up into too many increments breaks up the flow in a detrimental ...

Yaaay! More Mutts stuff--and about the robotic police officers, too! Let's see-- The AI unit lay still on the examination table. It was still and silent in sleep mode. You ...

Whoo hoo! A Stargate fan! Stargate fans, UNITE!!! Er, yeah. Sorry, but hey, it's always fun to meet people who share your interests, particularly the more obscure your interests are. ...

Wow, the newspaper format is truly interesting; I think you captured much of the feel of a real newspaper quite well. The idea described is rather old and somewhat worn ...

I came up with City of the Veen...just by opening a WordPad file and writing random stuff into it. It soon evolved into something I figured I could work into ...