Bickazer

It was a cold night in the middle of the winter and it started to snow slowly with big snow flakes that covered the village in a blanket of coldness ...

Would you mind taking a look at...any of the three chapters of The Zenith Cycle I have up (in the sci fi forum)? In particular, I'd like comments on the ...

Yes, this is the first of the chapters to actually have a name. It also introduces the two other main characters. Again, as I've stated before, I will be dividing ...

Very, very interesting concept you've got here--the world you've painted is believable and intriguing, and I for one can't wait to see more. I love your characterization of Ryan (he's ...

Would you please take a look at the first chapter of my science fiction story, "The Zenith Cycle"? :D You can find it in the science fiction forum (obviously). It's ...

Here's the rest of the review~! Sorry for truncating it so abruptly, but my mom was screaming . It was not pleasant in the least. Anyway... Leland laughed. Popped the ...

Yes! :D Another one! And, as always, well-written--I really, really , enjoyed this, and I think it's the strongest piece yet (at least of the few I've read so far...) ...

As if by design, the storm that pounded on the car roof, creating a steel mesh in the head lights, washing the highway in oily black, and the conversation inside ...

the moment, I've reopened my work on an epic six-book series I've been planning for some time, but stopped working on when I decided the project was too ambitious. Now, ...

Well - the one major thing I noticed in this chapter (besides its awesomeness) was that Orson's speaking style seems to have veered towards colloquial. He was always very honest ...

Here's the rest of Chapter One-- “Yeah? Like what?” he said. “Like…like the ring’s importance. Or, as you just said, the Zenith unit’s deactivation…” said Corseley, frowning at Orson.

This takes place in the early 1800s. Oh, sorry, I didn't mean the date (I notice you have the date before the story), just...generally... where the story takes place. England? ...

Ye-es, that's much better--much more emotional and informative (I still, however, am in the dark about where this takes place). I love your description; it's very vivid and your imagery ...

Welcome to YWS, Jessica! :D I haven't been here long either, but I'm already loving it. The people are VERY helpful, and well, it's just a great place to write. ...

Sorry for taking so long to critique--I was working on Zenith! I can't believe it but I've got my fire for the project back. Amaz-azing. (I think you--and all who ...