Bickazer

Thanks so much for the review. ^^ But first of all-- *you only need one hyphen, not two This "-" is called a dash. Two of them put together is ...

Okay, here goes-- ------------- I held her ribbon in my hands, and turned my eyes to the sky. The clouds hung low and gray and stormy; the grass in the ...

Sorry for the late review. My life got consumed by studying and so on...:( But I'm here now! So... First of all--awesome ending. You really seem to be building up ...

A kind of shy, conscientious Russian boy, pale-haired, possibly very sickly. His heart is in the right place but he's kind of weak-willed. Probably upper-class. Enrique "Quique" de Leon

This time, I'll take characters from the Juaniverse (ack, that was lame). "No one in particular. Thou shalt not kill and so on, and besides, my job stresses detachment. I ...

Well...here's the rest of chapter two. Sorry for not posting sooner. I was busy pretending to study for the PSAT. Ah, so much subversion. Here it goes-- “Quid pro quo, ...

"Who sings in the shower? That's just--ugh. Uck. I don't want anything to do with you, dammit." ~Louis "I'm sorry, I don't sing in the shower. That's a rather odd ...

"Three...yeah *winces* Three's a crowd. I say anything above one is a crowd, though." ~Louis "That's nonsense, Orson. You put up with me just fine." ~Peter "Really? Since when? ~Louis ...

An adventurous woman, maybe with a background in intelligence (you know, as a secret agent) who's since left and has started a business of her own. And by "business", I ...

Well, I wasn't sure whether to put this in "Romance" or "Other Fiction"...romance is a key component of this story, but I'm not sure how much of a love story ...

La la~! I felt guilty about not reviewing any of your stuff after you've given so many helpful reviews to Zenith, so...here I am! Great story, I loved it. Which ...

This is for the Creative Communications writing contest, in which I have the potential to get published and earn a lot of money. This is my first time doing it, ...

Yeesss...this is better than the first draft, and I can definitely appreciate how hard you've worked--particularly if you've been editing this for a month. An excellent sense of commitment there. ...

Okay, here's the rest of the review. I'll try to be less nitpicky than before, but...I doubt I'll be able to. Sorry if I'm neurotic! >_> Bring. Huh? What's this ...

Like I said, line by line. :D I may not get through all this today, though--understand I'm rather busy (and need to get cracking on studying for the P-sat). So...here ...