Bickazer

Would you take a look at an excerpt from a science fiction novel I'm working on? It isn't too long...(I hope), and it's in desperate need of some feedback. Thanks ...

Any one of my Vicissitudes stories (in my portfolio) would be fine. :)

Vicissitudes 3 and 4? *puppy dog eyes* Tres: y cuatro: Many thanks in advance. :)

Er, I'm feeling a little pathetic about not getting reviews... *ducks and hides*

Only two, and very minor. But hey, they're there. Anyway, after our little detour with Ludwig, this story returns to the main narrative. It's another one of the Laurence-centered stories ...

I highly doubt the laws of physics will undergo a complete revolution in a thousand and fifty years. They've worked for the past five billion or so, why change in ...

Yeah, you can check out my project (called "How can this be?") in the Writers' Corner, and the "potential prologue" I posted a while ago. This is from the same ...

If you're still doing this... Could you look at the fourth and fifth Vicissitudes story? I'm getting saddened by the lack of reviews. >_> And please be harsh. Espeically with ...

Okay, prepare for a long review, though I chose not to do the line-by-line treatment because it was so long. Maybe you could cut this into smaller parts? Because I ...

I seriously think this is the worst story of them all...and wouldn't have pounded it out if I didn't think that Ludwig deserved a voice of his own. For one ...

Divine is the holy, the "good." Dark is the damned, the "evil." That's what most fantasy, as well as religion, is based off of, good and evil. Fantasy without that ...

I'm going to be frank and say... Right now it sounds like a fairly typical high fantasy plot. Sorry. But that might just be because I don't like the fantasy ...

Wow, glad you liked it (though I'm sure there's something to critique...). I'm surprised you liked Dora, though, because I kind of found her...hard to write. At least harder to ...

Here's the fifth Vicissitudes story...there's a little cursing here but not too much, so I guess a PG-13 rating will work (hopefully *is suspicious*). This is the story told through ...

But it's not really fantasy. Yeah, since I'm waiting for more reviews on my Vicissitudes stories (in the Romantic Fiction section), I decided to post this. A rather...interesting...piece that I ...