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Here goes the nitpick machine. ^^ *cough trying to distract myself from writers block cough* Merlin lifted his head and stared at the sight before him "Stared" doesn't seem right ...

I feel bad for this, but I'm back now, so...ba-bump.

With this part, the monster of a chapter is finally over. There won't be another chapter like this until sixteen, so breathe easy, everyone! Again, this picks up directly after ...

"I don't think either of those is the right thing to do. Hiding things is bad, but flapping your lips at everything is even worse." ~Nendo "I think the most ...

"I don't have a girlfriend." ~Nendo, Tey "I am not sexually active, so I don't have to deal with such issues." ~Luanna "....I will not answer that question." ~Darian "If ...

"No." ~Nendo "...looks like they'd hurt." ~Tey "I'm not a hooligan, for goodness' sake." ~Luanna "Nobles don't get those sort of things. 'Unfortunately', Lord Masudo might add..." ~Darian "My, my, ...

"Internet? What's that?" ~Nendo, Tey, Jyuna "The Internet? Oh, the antiquated system they had on Earthbound days? The Stellarnet is much better!" ~Luanna "I think I've heard about this 'internet' ...

Try anything by Kurt Vonnegut and George Orwell. They seem to be from the time period that you enjoy, and are brilliant writers to boot.

"Well, I can do it, but I don't really read for fun. I don't really have time to do so." ~Nendo "I didn't know how to read until recently, and ...

Alternating first person views is the only kind of first person I can stand. It can be done well. It can be done beautifully. Case in point: Barbara Kingsolver's The ...

President Nixon making victory signs while riding a reindeer. Bickazer

It's been a while, so I don't know if you remember...but yeah, those Vicissitudes stories? They're kind of lacking in love, and would love your love again. Well, that sentence ...

"Something tangible, like food and money." ~Nendo "If Nendo does it first." ~Tey "Nothing." ~Luanna "You have got to be kidding me." ~Darian "Why not, Lord Darian? You can just ...

Darian would be happy beyond belief because she wouldn't have to hide being a girl anymore, because she now is a man. Although she'll start wondering if this makes her ...

Here's my review. :) It'll be a little less nitpicky than the previous one because I think I took care of most of the nitpicks there. As soon as I ...