Bickazer

Now, you're not being fair. When you post your works on a public forum , for critique, that means that you're accepting any sort of critique that comes your way. ...

One word: Plan. Plaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaan. Play~ay~ay~aaaan~ All right, that was a little over the top, but you get the point. I used to have the exact same story, until I discovered ...

All right, I don't know if it's fail so much as nervousness over writing a properly mysterious scene...but we shall see. The first part (that is, the conversation between Nendo ...

Sounds like a romantic YA novel with a strong music theme...more of a garange band kind of music, not classical. Possibly about the MC trying to capture the attention of ...

"I really don't want to think about anything so morbid." ~Nendo "...I dunno...something impressive, I suppose. But I can't think what." ~Tey "Since I plan on dying quietly, in my ...

It's me again! Let's see how in-depth I can make this since I'm operating under a time limit of sorts... Jasti's hands remained on Haraan's shoulders as a way of ...

There are books that get away with doing it (such as the Hannibal books), but as a general rule, it's rather disturbing/weird to see it done the first way. It ...

Here's chapter six, which has some minor continuity errors (mostly regarding the terms Founders/guardians) which I'm unsure how to fix. There's more worldbuilding in this chapter than any of the ...

"Mom" and "Dad" looks the most natural, especially if you're writing in third person limited. You essentially are writing the story from their point of view, so it would be ...

Here I am, on the first chapter. ^^ Since I haven't looked at the other reviews, if I'm bringing up points that have already been trod on, feel free to ...

Aughhh...this preface thing. XD My personal preferences are coming in play, but I really don't like the idea of prefaces. This reads much more like a first chapter than a ...

Hi, skjold, I'll be your reviewer for today. ^^ Since this piece is so long, I'm going to only leave my impressions on the first part. Also, though I tend ...

...no, this story does not have Gurren Lagann references in it. Why do you ask? (Idach doesn't even show up in this chapter...) Anyway, this is my favorite scene so ...

Hi, Shina, I'm here with a review. ^^ I actually had one halfway typed up, but my internet conked out on I probably won't go as in-depth as I usually ...

Hi, blackpencil, I'll be your reviewer today. ^^ The raging of a magnificent battle echoed throughout the jagged peaks of the Catarach Mountains. For a first sentence, this is horribly ...