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Hi, Doctor, here's me with the review. Since I'm very pressed on time I might not finish it in one go but rest assured I will get it done. ^^ ...

Here's the second part of my critique. I don't have much specifically to say because much is the same as it was before, and I do believe many of the ...

Amon and Rosey have mostly got it. ^^ I'd just like to add that one way to really show character emotions is to describe scenes just as the character would. ...

As for when to use passive over active, that's really up to you. I've been critizied a bit for using passive voice (by none other than Bicakzer) but it can ...

I don't think using "was" to describe something is technically passive voice (feel free to correct me if I'm wrong, anyone). It's when you use a "was [verb]ing" construction a ...

Here's the ninth chapter, which I'm sure all who read the cliffhanger chapter eight ended on are awaiting eagerly. I'm going to try to post in smaller installments, which I ...

Hi, Merlin, you've got yourself another reviewer. ^^ I couldn't help but feel intrigued when I read your topic in the Writer's Corner yesterday, so I got cracking on reviewing. ...

Go for it--it could be a marvelous exploration of how different societies work and how the societies effect people and their worldviews (I'm imagining that in order to write each ...

I've finally gotten around to reviewing this. XD Sorry I'm so late! Anyway, I now think I know what you feel like when you're reviewing my stuff because honestly, I ...

Just finished Sin City, "The Hard Goodbye" and "A Dame To Kill For". I realize that I've only really been judging Frank Miller by his work that sucks now (All ...

Hi, Doctor, here's the review (at last!). ^^ He could almost taste the air, thick with the festival’s smells; cooking meat and the spicy seasoning his region was known for, ...

You've looked correctly--there are no parts to this one, because it's the first chapter short enough to fit into one topic. Yay. This is my favorite chapter so far, but ...

Aggh, you're probably inundated with these already, but I have to ask why I can't send PMs. And this is more a personal thing than anything, but I quite liked ...

It might be just that I'm stupid or something, but I can't for the life of me figure out how to edit a post on this new site. The button's ...

My entry for Amon360's vampire contest. Rated R for violence. All critiques are welcome, especially since the deadline is coming up. The Big Leagues Benjy Young winced as Zane’s heavy ...