Bhayden71297

“Ey, Posh! Where ya going?” I turned away from my locker and followed him closely, wondering why he was heading to the west wing, when it was time for lunch, ...

Hey there!:) I really felt the pain and suffering of the girl. You described exactly everything she went through. It was deep and the reason it hit me so hard, ...

This was so far good! Great plot, and actually a little sad and touching. You managed to stick some emotion in there, just enough to feel like you were living ...

(I really would like help with the tense of this piece. i want it in present tense, and would like help pointing out where I need to change it to ...

(Any feedback welcome. About the plot, story idea, ending, beginning- please and thanks, Brie♥) “Mom,” was all she said. A woman of forty looked up into the stony eyes of ...

(Any feedback welcome. About the plot, story idea, ending, beginning- please and thanks, Brie♥) “Mom,” was all she said. A woman of forty looked up into the stony eyes of ...

(Any feedback welcome. About the plot, story idea, ending, beginning- please and thanks, Brie♥) “Mom,” was all she said. A woman of forty looked up into the stony eyes of ...

Hey- Wow. W.O.W.That's all I have to say. Just...wow. I don't even know if there's anything to correct here. Its...amazing. I could really relate to it. Told my whole life ...

(A little thing I wrote after one amazing, important softball game. So. Much. Pressure. Give me anything ya got. Thx- Brie :D) One look at the score board told me ...

Hey there! :) Great basic plot of the story. It's sad, depressing and just plain sweet. Kinda like Shakespeare and his tragedies :p Even though they're sweet, they're still sad. ...

Hey! :) I need help believing, That you are on my side. That you are not going to hurt me, Too many times I’ve cried. Okay so I like the ...

(Please tell me what you think. It was a quick write, to refresh my brain and keep my writing skill active. Just comment on whatever catches your eye. Thanks- Brie♥) ...

This was absolutely beautiful! You've captured emotion and spread it our nicely for all us to see and experience. Great job! For a a person that's "not a poet" you ...

I love the concept of this piec. More over I love the piece! It was amazingly written and just beautiful. I felt as if i were hte one writing that ...

(I wrote this awhile ago. Please correct whatever you find needs to be. I openly accept opinions and any constructive criticism. Thanks guys! -Brie♥) Man was she a sight standing ...