BerlynnRae

The final act! OMG it was so good. I was flipping out the ENTIRE time! That is probably my favorite. This was very creative and fun. I liked how in ...

That was so good! It was different than what I remembered before. I loved how you described the castle I could completely see everything. Some little side note, I found ...

Someone shook me, my eyes rolled to the source only to find a too happy soccer mom peering over me. "Bree, Sweetheart, you need to get up now." She smiled ...

Here's chapter one of "The Effect". you may review it but a lot of people have and I really need chapter 2/3 reviewed. This is just to give you some ...

heres the link to the second/third chapter of "The Effect"

I loved the story I was really interested in how you described the mnt. dew falling on the floor. That was genius pure genius. I think that it would have ...

Light shone on my face, and a inconstant hum of voices carried to where i was. My eyes closed as I tried to remember. My head aced, what happened? I ...

P.S. This is my first sci-fi ever. so please be nice about the technical things. :) thanks again!

This is a sci-fi I'm writing for a friend. I have to hand it to him by May 5th which means that it has to be edited before then. PLEASE ...

Beep. Beep. It was time, I had hoped they couldn't find me. I guess it was inevitable my ship had recklessly crashed into a house on Earth. I was running ...

Well first off I loved how it was in first person. Secondly it was completely smooth, which i loved. I just finished reading another sci-fi on YWS and it went ...

Thanks and there are two reasons for the dash A) I wrote this originally on a text so you couldn't see where one thought started and another ended. B) I ...

"Nothing could be more beautiful than pure gold- Nothing more pristine as night falls- For the rare sight never grows old- The sad thought that it's only a moment- The ...

I loved all of it but it started to get confusing at this part: "Kelly! You’re right, it was different with us. But don’t you worry about it; I will ...

I apologize I found this very difficult to read. I did read the original copy before you edited it. One of the first things that caught my attention was how ...