BerlynnRae

will you review my work "I can't keep you Secret" 85267

Gryffindor13: I wanted my readers to fill in the character. I find that when I am reading a story about a girl with red hair I find it hard to ...

I was wondering if you would review a piece of my story. (Its an excerpt of a back round of someone that's not a main character but I thought I ...

I looked over the small balcony that allowed me to peer over my country. In all its beauty and wonder Thorium was the most enchanting place I had ever visited. ...

I re-did it and am in the process of editing it but I had to pre-maturely save

This is based off of the song "Breathe" by Ryan Star I sighed and signed my name at the bottom of the page. Making it a beautiful display. I re-read ...

I loved this piece of yours (although I love most of your pieces ^_^) The voice in this one was very clear. I didn't get it was a boy because ...

Hand me a paper, hand me a pen. I can't believe I'm doing this again. Writing that letter that will never get to you. So, should I start with 'Dear ...

I'm only doing chapter one but I'll do the other chapters later: I was interested because "Man down" wasn't in "..". But some grammar, (My friend, and, partner Commander Cody, ...

"Not you, I can say- sweet and kind phrases- but in the end, they are just words- words are what my mighty pen creates- shadows and imitations of thoughts and ...

The first stanza I loved. It begins with a perfect picture in my head of a still night/morning. When the sun is peaking and the night is yawning. Brilliant. The ...

I understand the deep feeling in it. Although the repetition was drawing away from the emotion that this person had regarding the pains of love. Love is indeed worth the ...

So are you judging the contest?

Its exactly 1999 characters long. The contest form said 2000 characters

I looked around the shack I shared with my older sister, the Great Witch Mimics. She had probably left to gather pond scum for a poison to slip to some ...