BenFranks

I'd try and be more surreal, that's my only point really. If you're going to be imaginative and out of the box when you write, give it everything and don't ...

Hey. Can't really critique a stunning piece of originality such as this. I mean you haven't gone wrong anywhere. There's constant fluency and punches of imagery and its individual. It's ...

Infront of a computer after dinner and in the evening. -- Perhaps a touch of music. :)

'Ullo Bexi! :D 'Tis me, Ben! Any'oo, I am in dire need of a room plate! So when I stumbled across this thread on this friday evening I was jolly ...

I think faith should be apart of everyone's life. I'm an Atheist, but do you know what the first thing I'd do in a life threatening situation is? I'd pray ...

Thanks for this post Nate. :) I haven't been with YWS long but I'm going to be here a long while yet :) Mwahaha. Ben

Hey and welcome to YWS! -- Note: Run spell check before posting -- Okay, have a quick revision of grammar and typos so we can read your quotes easier. Also ...

You have a nice variation of tips here. Try 'em all :D Ben

Hey there! Repetitions - Line length - Tone I feel this would've worked for the first 2 or 3 lines but it gets too much after that and it's a ...

Voyager forever :) haha.

I disagree with Galerius almost everywhere! Especially with recreating a character from Schindler's List I'd insist on keeping the originality of this work, as opposed to intertwining the ideas with ...

Another good bit of work! I think in terms of manga (because you're already very talented with it) you should try and strengthen the lines of your work more, make ...

Hey there Rayne! I adore this! I personally love how you've strengthened the image with a Sharpie it gives that impacting effect. Anyway, I'm glad you used an eraser because ...

I think you can discuss a subject like this all you want, but you're only going to provoke a response that makes your argument look "flawed". There are huge amounts ...

I'd rate this 12+ for "bitch" & perhaps post in lyrics?