BenFranks

It's also the wrong place to have posted it.

Hey there Shubhi! Most people have pointed out the nitpicks, so I won't bother you with any dull repetition, what I will say though, concerns your dialogue. At the start ...

Reg Carter "Not likely," Bree said. "Ah, well. Me and the fella have a bit of respect for each other now," I said to her, reassuringly. "Huh? How come?" she ...

Can this get stickied? *wonders*

Hey there! Hopefully this wasn't a waste of an hour! XD I'm Ben and this is a short piece to help you guys write and perfect your Non-fiction. Obviously, I'm ...

Hi there! I have to agree with fiction that the "it" seems to be a little repetitive and I share his confusion a little as to trying to understand what ...

Hey there! So, erm, most of the nitpicking has been done already and I'm sure what they've suggested will help you alot. However, my feedback for you is on the ...

Reg Carter I picked up my phone as I left Max's room and dialed Suzie's number. "Suzie?" I asked through the phone. "Reg? That you?" She replied. "Sure is." I ...

Thanks Amy :D

Thankyou! :D

Sure I'll get on it.

Reg Carter I left the room and walked back into where Bree was. She was still a little upset but more silent now. More in thought. I sat next to ...

Reg Carter I sat there and comforted Bree for a minute. She turned to me and gave me a kiss. At that point the feelings filled up, the rememberance of ...

John Barry/James Bond As me, 008, Oliver, Sonja and the rest of the cast tried to find a reason for all the seriousness of it all, I grew ever more ...

Reg Carter I hear grumbling from upstairs in Riles' room. I burst in and see what all the fuss is about. And then amuse myself with the sight of a ...