BelarusBirdy

Storm: "Something's up," Eve whispers to me. "Yeah, I can feel it too," I whisper back. I'm trying to decide how to just hit Leo. It's going to be really ...

In a few places, it seems like the rhyme scheme is sort of holding you back. It was cutting into the meaning of the song, and I don't think that's ...

I can relate to this. If you don't mind, can I ask what it's about? You don't have to answer if it's really personal or something. Great imagery. Even if ...

This is just the first verse and the chorus, I need to write the other verses and add to this. (Intro made of the sounds of a storm. First there's ...

Storm: I turn away from the stares and stop my laughter from echoing across the room. It surrounds me in a tiny little bubble of sound. As soon as I ...

Storm: Vi starts to wrap his other wrist. Fine. Fine. I don't care. She wasn't even doing it wrong in the first place. She just...I wasn't even really thinking at ...

Rain: Stupid Arthur. Stupid, stupid, stupid. We don't have time for this. If Wolf described his psycho little brother right, we should be running, maybe trying to weaken the mental ...

Thanks!

thanks! I accidentally do that sometimes. :) Thanks for bringing that to my attention!

I like it! Write a part 4 please!!! Please please please write a part 4 soon! It's a good twist in the plot. I need to read more! Keep Writing, ...

Storm: The blueprint isn't all that confusing. I'll let the others look at it and try to puzzle it out. Let them feel all important about it. I saw Vi ...

I like how you changed it, It makes it better to have another person telling the story. It's easier to relate to. Keep Writing, Bel

Rain: Wolf got one of the firebolts, but there's still three, and he's collapsed on the floor by the windows. I summon all the raindrops into one, as much water ...

It says %u2019 in the middle all over the place. Is that unintentional? Anyways, good story. You could continue it. I'm not going to say you should, because I like ...

Oh my gosh oh my gosh oh my gosh!!!! SAD!! But still really good. I liked how you never really said what the Test was until the end, but it ...