BelarusBirdy

I like the story. It's not the type of story I typically read, but I like it.

I disagree. Another character would add length to this story, and you said you wanted it shorter. I don't think it needs to be shorter, though. I think it's fine ...

Thanks! If you like this, you might want to read 'Black Box' by Julie Schumacher. It's about a girl whose little sister was diagnosed with depression, but it's better than ...

This is truly art. It's what narrative poetry is about- telling a story and leaving people with enough unanswered questions to read it again. The constancy of the rhyme scheme ...

This is a beautiful poem with a beautiful story. Thanks for posting it. It will give me something to think about for several days :)

pretty good, but a bit cliche. (Sorry, I'm not trying to be a jerk.) One thing you need to think about is making all the "paranormal junk" different from the ...

Walking down the hall again. It's 3:05 again. Meeting with Dr. Collins again. Left, right, left, right... That's the way they want us thinking. I know what they're really up ...

I'm new here too! Yay for new people! anyways, on the subject of the poem, I thought it was really good. It has good flow and a sense of finality ...

this is a magnificent poem! i like how you describe insanity because that's what it's like, i think.

I really like this and I can relate to it so well. Not to be mean, but now I just want to say that the flow of the poem could ...

That's really powerful. Someone actually said that? wow. I love the description.

Profile: Name:Storm Cloud Age(18+): eighteen Appearance (no anime):about 5' (one of the side effects of a medication was being short) with strawberry blond hair (hates it when people call her ...

I love the idea of making them Fae. It adds a twist on the idea of the arranged marriage. I thought it was pretty well written, with a few mistakes ...

I love this story! I think it's a great short story. I don't have any criticisms, I just wanted to tell you that I thought it was a very good ...

I can relate to this, sort of. I think along those lines a lot :) and I encourage you not to give up the more...abstract view of the world. It ...